Critique

Boyd Justin

Professor Broadous

PAS 114b

February 23, 2012

Critique The Golden Arch

·         Voice: The voice seemed odd to me. I felt as though there was a sort of conversational aspect of the story. Almost as if I was expected to reply at times. I am not a fan of how the voice was portrayed in this story.

·         Audience: The was easy for anyone to follow which made it a universally great story no matter the age or age group trying to be reached. The story line was great but it seemed to be a bit cliché.

·         Detail: the detail was done very well and I enjoyed the amount of detail. It showed that the story line had been polished and developed fairly well. There were some grammatical errors that could not be ignored. I stumbled over quite a few parts of the story and at some parts I had to reread a few sentences to ensure that I had chosen the right words.

·         Meaning/Symbolization: This was done very well because it gave the instrument a personality and worth other than money. I became more encompassed in the instrument than the character. The instrument went on to exude a sort of soul when the music was played which amazed me while reading.

·         Structure: The structure of the story seemed fragile. The transitions were a bit sloppy, such as one of the paragraphs beginning in a quote. The structure could have used more work but it surely was an improvement from the previous paper I had read. The structure was done well.

·         Organization: The organization was simple which caused no real confusion in the story. I was able to fully follow it and interpret all that was happening.